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Elemental poems 3: Fire by =HtBlack:iconHtBlack:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Open


Fire, the weapon of Hell
and when it's inside us we're as bad as that;
so easy to light but don't think it's well
'cause it goes ever forward without rest.

All it ruined to ash and black's the ground
like the mood of who's possessed by its heat
is it Nature or men who must amend
for making the living die at their feet?

Fury of fire the meaning's the same
blood boils within and you're wanting to rage;
(what changes between them is just the name)
and when you feel that way you could tear any cage.

With fire inside we all live and fight
carrying anger and our broken pride
not caring if we destroy what was bright
until fire's out,and grief and shame shatter our mind.
©2008-2009 =HtBlack
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Author's Comments

This is my third elemental poem. Fire connects to anger, does it not? I think it that way :) waiting for your comments as always.

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*readthewholelibrary Nov 14, 2008, 2:48:04 PM
I really like series of poems!

This one is really cool, I love the way you word it.

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=HtBlack Nov 14, 2008, 2:52:45 PM
I'm gonna blush :) however, I wrote the whole series already but I'll add one per day (three are missing if I'm not mistaken), it's more funny that way!

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"Your Orwellian language notwithstanding- it's a fucking machine. It's a tool."

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The words are the spark.
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*readthewholelibrary Nov 14, 2008, 4:25:52 PM
Cool! Looking forward to them!

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“Obama's teleprompter...Palin's policies...brain is trying to find a correlation...abort! Abort!” - ~Laerbn
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=HtBlack Nov 14, 2008, 4:32:36 PM
Thank you, you won't be let down :)

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"Your Orwellian language notwithstanding- it's a fucking machine. It's a tool."

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I'm an admin for #theWrittenRevolution .
The words are the spark.
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=iamadem Nov 14, 2008, 10:36:15 PM
this is realy outstanding. im sorry i dont have any critiqeu for you. i just am no good at those things. :(

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"Ég gægist út, en er svo ekki neitt."
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=HtBlack Nov 15, 2008, 3:15:07 PM
Thanks so much!no need for critique, I just like the fact that you read them :)

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"Your Orwellian language notwithstanding- it's a fucking machine. It's a tool."

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I'm an admin for #theWrittenRevolution .
The words are the spark.
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=iamadem Nov 15, 2008, 10:12:33 PM
of course. i love your work. :kiss:

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"Ég gægist út, en er svo ekki neitt."
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=HtBlack Nov 16, 2008, 3:11:16 PM
Always so nice :)

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"Your Orwellian language notwithstanding- it's a fucking machine. It's a tool."

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I'm an admin for #theWrittenRevolution .
The words are the spark.
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*LuciferDragon Jul 8, 2009, 4:11:08 PM
This one's my fave so far. Really deep and great description.

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I'm a :ahoy: all the way!
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